That's pretty awesome. Very cool poem! I love it up until the end. But i'm not quite feeling either of the endings you have up there. of course i'm picky but...maybe if you make it more definitive like:
"Allright, I'm giviing up my future now, The crazy cat lady I'm going to be!"
Otherwise I think i'd go with the 2nd one you have up as it rhymes better. (I would suggest using "to" instead of "I'll")
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Date: 2007-01-05 01:54 am (UTC)I love it up until the end.
But i'm not quite feeling either of the endings you have up there.
of course i'm picky but...maybe if you make it more definitive like:
"Allright, I'm giviing up my future now,
The crazy cat lady I'm going to be!"
Otherwise I think i'd go with the 2nd one you have up as it rhymes better.
(I would suggest using "to" instead of "I'll")